The way you begin the poem is commendable. However, beyond the opening the poem vanishes off with no traces whatsoever of the moxie which possessed the opening two lines which to my pleasant surprise were great, even logically comprehensible.. prophetic too. But the poem went off-key for me (or was it my mind>) with your no longer subtle i-am-talking-like-a-prophet mannerism.
well,the whole point of the rhetorical device,in this case -repetition,was to lay emphasis on that itself..the poem relates to a very spiritual concept(Advaita)...so it was contextual...but yes,i realise it was a little weak in content..will work on it!
The way you begin the poem is commendable. However, beyond the opening the poem vanishes off with no traces whatsoever of the moxie which possessed the opening two lines which to my pleasant surprise were great, even logically comprehensible.. prophetic too. But the poem went off-key for me (or was it my mind>) with your no longer subtle i-am-talking-like-a-prophet mannerism.
ReplyDeletewell,the whole point of the rhetorical device,in this case -repetition,was to lay emphasis on that itself..the poem relates to a very spiritual concept(Advaita)...so it was contextual...but yes,i realise it was a little weak in content..will work on it!
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